This is the first book I ever finished! Feel free to read the original version or the new and improved version. I also created an RPG that connects to this book and the second and third book so feel free to read those when your done! 

Well I hope you enjoy this! Just to warn you there may been some creepy parts to the book, romance and gore.

Please feel free to give comments. Don't copy this either please. This is my hard work, I put it up here for people to enjoy, not copy. Thank you and enjoy! -^-^-

First version: Pg 1-27

Rewritten version: Pg 28-

The Felixi

(Rewritten version)

By Mina

 

Prologue

On the other side of another world from earth is a wonderful kingdom. The kingdom is perfect in every way, without sickness or death and the people live there happily forever and ever. The King of this kingdom is known as The Great King, for he is better than any other king who has come. He is the one who created the universe and everything within it with his awesome and magnificent power. Everyone in the kingdom has incredible powers and can do things no human could do, but the King has such power that all tremble before him. Even though he is frightening he is also loving and loves all of his people so much that no one can even begin to understand how much he does.

One day, one of the King’s closest advisors decided he wanted power like his master and he wanted to become a great king. So secretly he began plotting and working out an idea of how he could take down the King. When he felt ready he took his own son, who was a mind reader, and mutated him until he created his own power, a dark and vile power. A power that destroys and eats away not like The Great King had created and planned. In secret he taught his son how to harness his powers in hopes of destroying The Great King. What he never expected was his own son wanted power for himself. In his greed he killed his own father and went after the throne himself. The Great King was not one to loose though and in an epic battle defeated the boy. The Great King was furious with him though and banished him to the other side where the mortals lived.

The boy grew and made a name for himself “The great lord” and he was the terror of the land and mutated a few more of his kind quickly multiplying and creating his own kingdom. He had a son of his own who took his place and did even more evil then his father. Slowly their kind created enough of themselves to attack the largest nation on the planet beginning the longest war the world had and would, ever know…

Characters: (Spoiler Alert!)

Here's a pic of Darson, He would look older, have slightly darker hair, eyes would be less creepy and he wouldn't be pouting.

Mike, the bully

Darson's mom. I never really gave her a name. She wouldn't be sad though.

Tanya. Darson's sister

The S.C.A.M

Felixivent, He would look less evil (For now) and he would also have a slightly smaller forehead.

So this pic is the closest I could get to Newton. He'd have black hair and green eyes though.

Heres Miya! If her hair was just the tiny bit longer she'd be perfect.

This pic kinda looks like Rea. She would have more orange in her hair and have yellow eyes.

Adamina! (thank you Zhadow!!!!)

Heres Nathan! He'd look just a bit older. 

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Levi's mask! (^)

Levi (v) (He would have purple eyes)

Zia

How to pronounce some words

Felixi: felixE

Darson: Not Darsin, but Darson (kinda french)

Felixivent: felixE vent

Athia: athEa

Galena (gal E na)

Galenian (gal E n E in)

(If you find any other hard to pronounce words in this book plz tell me)

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Chapter 1
When I came into the world I was an average kid. I laughed, cried and played like any other child. On my 16th birthday that all changed. A kid named Mike who I had to invite to by birthday was driving me nuts. I told him that we were going to play some video games and Mike, who was determined to drive me crazy, decide he wouldn't do anything I told him. I know it was a small thing but Mike had always bugged me and so this just set me off. We both stood face to face trying to angrily stare each other down. Suddenly everything paused. My mom was mid stride coming to separate us. My friends mid cheer, excited about a fight. I found to my surprise, I could see Mikes thoughts! He was thinking “Darson is such an easy target. This dumb party is a lot more fun then I thought!” I had the most weirdest instinct come over me. I felt I needed to change his thoughts. “You will stop bugging me and do whatever I want” I thought to him. Everything went back to normal and everyone started moving again like nothing happened. My mom pushed us apart. “Today is supposed to be fun! Stop this!” I should have been looking at my mom but I was looking at Mike he looked funny. He just stared into space for a second then he broke out into a silly smile. “Come on everyone!” He said. “Darson wants to play video games! Lets go!” Everyone stood in shock. “What did he just say? What happened?”

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Hmm... This is weird does it look black or is it just me?

It's black.

Whoa! I wish I could change people's thoughts! Cool! 

Darn... I'll try to fix it and maybe add another chapter.

If you copied and pasted this from somewhere else, like a Word document, it might have kept the formatting which includes text color.

A kid named Mike who I (had *)to invite to (by) birthday was driving me nuts. 

Minus (brackets), should be:

A kid named Mike, who I had invited to (my) birthday(,) was driving me nuts.

* Why is this underlined?

Haha! Mine went black too.

It's your pasting format, fyi. Change the font color and type before pasting next time.

Oh OK thanks I'll try that. It's underlined because he had to invite the kid to his B-day.

I would suggest italicizing had instead of underlining it.

Chapter 1
When I came into the world I was an average kid. I laughed, cried and played like any other child. On my 16th birthday that all changed. A kid named Mike who I had to invite to by birthday was driving me nuts. I told him that we were going to play some video games and Mike, who was determined to drive me crazy, decide he wouldn't do anything I told him. I know it was a small thing but Mike had always bugged me and so this just set me off. We both stood face to face trying to angrily stare each other down. Suddenly everything paused. My mom was mid stride coming to separate us. My friends mid cheer, excited about a fight. I found to my surprise, I could see Mikes thoughts! He was thinking “Darson is such an easy target. This dumb party is a lot more fun then I thought!” I had the most weirdest instinct come over me. I felt I needed to change his thoughts. “You will stop bugging me and do whatever I want” I thought to him. Everything went back to normal and everyone started moving again like nothing happened. My mom pushed us apart. “Today is supposed to be fun! Stop this!” I should have been looking at my mom but I was looking at Mike he looked funny. He just stared into space for a second then he broke out into a silly smile. “Come on everyone!” He said. “Darson wants to play video games! Lets go!” Everyone stood in shock. “What did he just say? What happened?”


Chapter 2
That night while lying in bed I tried to figure out what exactly had just happened. The rest of my party Mike did anything I wanted with that same cheesy smile. If someone tried to talk to him he’d start going on about how great my party was or how I was such a great guy. It was so... unnatural. “Could I have possibly made him do that?” I wondered. The next morning I decided to test my theory. My younger sister Tanya was just waking up and walking down the hall when I came out of my room and as the first person I saw I decided to use her as my test subject. I grabbed Tanya by the shoulders, pulled her face to mine and stared straight into her eyes. Again like before everything paused and I could see her thoughts. “What the...” “Clean my room” I thought to her. Everything again went to normal and my sister had the same weird look. She broke out into a smile and cheerfully informed me that she’d be cleaning my room. I backed into the wall and leaned against it. “I can control peoples minds!” Now that I think about I wished I had been more careful with such power, but at 16 with a sudden realization of great power I got excited. I found I could do anything with this power and it was so simple. I guess it didn’t take a rocket scientist to figure out something weird was going on. The birthday party incident my mom just left alone but she started noticing I came home everyday from school without homework, my sister was always doing chores from “The kindness in her heart” and I kept bringing new popular friends home from school. She tried her best to figure out what was going but I bet she never even guess I had supernatural powers. Unfortunately it became to easy to notice and it wasn’t long before they came. Who are they? The S.C.A.M. or Supernatural Children Association Madness. I added in the last part because truly it was all just a scam. When  a small black car with tinted windows pulled in front of our house and men in pressed suits and tinted glasses started walking up our driveway my mom got worried so she sent me and my sister to our rooms. I don’t know how long my mom was talking with those men but it seemed like forever. I started wondering if they were terrorists hurting my mom and if I should go downstairs! Finally my mom came up stairs and came into my room. She sat on my bed beside me and I realized she had been crying. “ I need to tell you something.” she said. I waited patiently for her answer. “Well you see um er well I’m not really your birth mother.”

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